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CrazyCarmelFan!!!
03-08-2008, 04:00 PM
Zoe ushered into her room as Sarah unlocked the door. Mike and Zoe had just been kissing each other when they were almost caught out. Sarah suspected nothing. "Hya Zoe!" she said. "Are you in there?". Yes came the muffled reply of Zoe's voice which twinged with guilt. "Can I come in?" Sarah asked. "NO!" said Zoe. Sarah just walked off to the kitchen while Zoe gave a sigh of relief

Meanwhile Zak and Katy were getting a bit too close for comfort. They were snogging each other. No-one knew why but Katy was feeling neglected in her life and Zak - well Zak just needed a girl basically. Justin walked in on them his face crushed. "Katy" he said tears chocked in his voice "How could you"

Alfie
03-08-2008, 05:41 PM
Seems a bit short, but it sets the scene quite well. - Could do with a bit of length and some more originality, but other than that, it's quite good.

Louise Summers
03-08-2008, 05:51 PM
It is good i like the bit about zak, katy and justin

Hollyoaks_Rockz!
03-10-2008, 06:45 PM
Good Liking it!

gorgeousgirl
04-05-2008, 11:26 AM
good but could have been a bit longer lol. x